You have a great start here. Lots of good research!
Is the Introduction the Summary this proposal should not have an introduction. It only has a Summary, Current Problem, and Proposed Research.
You need to make it clear in the first paragraph of the Current Probem that you are asking for money to research a problem. You must say that you are asking for funds to research the problem of –then CLEARLY state the problem.
On page 3 of the Current Problem, you have a huge paragraph with too much information. Readers can only handle one topic per paragraph. This paragraph needs to be cut into three distinct paragraphs, each focusing on the three ideas in the paragraph.
You cannot end a section with a graphic. You must explain where the data in the graphic came from and refer to the graphic in the text. I think the graphic needs to be introduced earlier in the section when discussing the reasons.
The proposed research section must be set up as a list of tasks that can be plotted on a Gantt chart in the Task Schedule (not a table–a Gantt chart).
You cannot go into this proposal with the idea that all three solutions need to be implemented. Your job is to research the three and use the data collected to recommend the best solution to help retention. It feels as if you are working under the assumption that all three will work together.
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